Revision Redux

Another return to the writing process. . . .

Consider this a manuscript in need of revision:

It's pretty much a floppy mass of prickles. Needs work, huh? First, we'd better remove the excess. This calls for a tough editor. Be warned that the editing process isn't pretty.

Let's take a closer look:

All those unwieldy adverbs, the unnecessary adjectives, the strings of prepositional phrases have to go. Let's pare that manuscript down to its basics:

This is better, but it lacks form. Time to rewrite. Add some interesting stuff. Some sub-plots, maybe.
A richer texture. Possibly a metaphor or two. More detail.

Ah, it's getting better. Let's take a look from a slightly different point of view: 

Yeah, that's better.  Maybe add a hint of mystery. How about this viewpoint?

Yep. That manuscript is looking a lot better.

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